April 1, 2011
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Epic Follower/Blogfest Contest

My Twitter Pitch:

When Gracie Heart finds threatening notes in her circus costume, she doesn’t realize she’s the one trying to warn herself: she’s next.


  1. Unknown

    Intriguing! I think, if you can, it might be good to put a little more information about the character in your pitch. I don't know anything about her other than that she works at the circus. I really want to know how old she is.

  2. Loralie Hall

    Oh, wow. This is honestly the best pitch I've come across so far. For 140 characters, I think you've nailed it. Fantastic and compelling ^_^ best of luck to you!

  3. Libby

    Ooooooooooooh, that's good. Creepy and you pack in a lot of info without making it too obvious. The inclusion of the circus outfit lets us know a lot w/out having to read a lot. Nice job!
    I'm in the contest too!

  4. Lori M. Lee

    Love everything except 'she doesn’t realize she's the one trying to warn herself' if only b/c it made me go '…wait. What?' But I'm still intrigued and I'd want to read more about it.

  5. Allison Merritt

    I don't know if her last name is really conductive to the pitch. I've been seeing several with just first name and they sound okay. Otherwise, I love a good circus story.

  6. Bethany C Morrow

    I LOVE the way you've been able to add a twist IN the pitch! 😀 That was awesome! I'd only take out her last name so I could remove the colon and use the word "that". Smoother, no?

    WOW. Love it. 🙂

  7. MarcyKate

    Love the concept and the twist, but the delivery in the second clause felt awkward to me. Perhaps try something like:

    "What Gracie doesn't know when she finds threatening notes in her circus costume, is that she’s trying to warn herself and she’s next."

  8. Tina Moss

    Love it! I think you nailed it. Good luck!

  9. Kaleen

    Fanatastic! I don't have anything to add.

  10. Artemis Grey

    I love it! I agree with Bethany's suggestions, but it's totally intriguing!

  11. Lindsay Smith

    I like it! The threat of "you're next" is very clear. I'm a little fuzzier on how she can't know she's leaving herself the notes. Maybe hint at them being in her handwriting?

  12. CobraMisfit

    Very compelling. Multiple personalities, perhaps? Or something sinister that she's blocking. Great pitch.

  13. Margo Berendsen

    It's perfect until I hit the "she's next" – she's next for what? Promotion? Murder? Aha – maybe that's you're strategy – intrigue us and leave us hanging!

  14. S.A. Hussey

    "…she doesn’t realize she’s the one trying to warn herself: she's next."

    I don't get how she's warning herself. I'm a bit confused. I get the part that she's next (whatever that may be-to be killed, hurt) but I guess some clarity on the above would help me.

    Good luck.

  15. Jamie Corrigan

    Personally, I think it's perfect! Good job! I'm hooked! Good luck in the contest!! 🙂

  16. Ruth Donnelly

    Really love this. Good luck!

  17. Teralyn Rose Pilgrim

    The first half is exceptionally perfect, but the second could use work. I think saying she's the one leaving the notes is too much. Maybe you could say: "The notes affirm what deep down she's always known: she's next." That's not perfect, but you get the idea.

  18. douglas esper

    suspense, pending doom, and the circus…i can almost smell the elephant poop…when can i start reading?
    douglas esper

  19. Eliza Tilton

    If you're implying that she has multiple personalities, and one of them is warning her…fabulous! I liked it. It piques my interest, a lot!

  20. Shelley Watters

    Thanks for participating! I love this. It has me asking all sorts of questions and I really want answers! I wouldn't change a thing.

    Good luck!

  21. erica m. chapman

    Oh, this is great. Gracie Hart! I'll admit I thought of Miss Congeniality ;o)

    I would lose the colon, but other than that, it's really great. Nice job!

  22. LK Griffie

    Really nice job.

  23. Suzi McGowen

    I loved this! Great suspense and a nice creepy hook. I'd totally read pages!

Who is Kimberlee Turley?

Kimberlee Turley grew up in California where she earned a degree in Fashion Design from FIDM in 2005. Soon after, she married her husband, who was neither Mr. Darcy nor Edward Cullen, but he’d read her atrocious first novel and said it was “good” with a straight face.

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